"Jeremy" by Pearl Jam(6)

Pearl Jam’s portrayal of a troubled youth in “Jeremy” touches our emotions in a way no out song could. The person writing expresses his resentment and remorse for all he did. As Jeremy stares at the screen with fire burning deeply in his eyes, we all know he is thinking of the effect he will have on all his classmates if he does something drastic. Jeremy had been tease and ridiculed all throughout his life. His peers thought he was harmless. They should have known that it is always possible for someone to retaliate.

Jeremy was a very disturbed young man who grew numb with no sense of reality. Jeremy’s home life was a factor nobody understood. Although his parents were together, his mom didn’t care and his daddy didn’t give him attention of affection. He had already gone mental once by gnashing his teeth and biting the breast of a woman at recess. Using the past the students should have realized could “unleash the lion” in Jeremy at any moment. “Jeremy spoke in class today…” was a line of depression and remorse for those students in the classroom. He took the grandest step and the worst step. He shot himself. Jeremy ended his depression and hopefully taught those who taunted him a lesson. Nothing is every worth ending your life over. “Sticks and stones…”

Improving my writing (5)

When I re-read what I had written earlier, i realized that I have a problem with not using complete thoughts. Fragments are something I must work on. I also need to work on being so blunt with what the topic is. I need to ease the reader in to what the paper is going to be about. Mr. Hughes said in his comments to me, that some of the ways I phrased things were a bit rigid. I also have a problem with being specific and using examples when I talk about certain things. My thesis statements when i write don't present the main topic of the paper.

Some ways I can improve my writing is just to relax. I need to let more of my imagination come out through the paper, and I need to worry less about the facts. I basically write like I am going down a check list and mentioning every point that I am told to discuss. With all the research I did, I realized that my thesis statement should not only appeal to the audience, but it should explain everything that I am going to talk about throughtout the paper. If I relax more and develop my thoughts better, I can write one great paper.

Intelligence(4)

Intelligence is the ability to learn and understand. Everyone has intelligence if they open their mind and let the knowledge sink in. people who get the proper education from the time they were born to adulthood is intelligent. Some things are hard to understand, but as you mature, you are able to grow and understand things. What is intelligence really? I don't think you have to understand everything you are taught to be considered intelligent. Isn't knowing how to dance, cook, or use computers some form of intelligence? You understand and learned how to do it, so I think every person in their own right has some form of intelligence. You can recognize intelligence by grades or by thes kill someone has obtained in life. Intelligence is a very broad category with multiple divisions of it.